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Monday, January 7, 2013

The Accidental Stripper by Helen Cooper

Jenny is a college girl who decides to help out her best friend Katie by subbing for her one night at a strip club. While Jenny had no clue what she was in for at the club, she did have the time of her life.


Thank goodness it's over! Sorry, I had to get that off my chest. The idea, the story itself, it wasn't bad. Actually I enjoyed it. Unfortunately all of the spelling, grammar, and random mistakes killed it for me. I cannot get into a story, and go into this world, if there's an issue on every page. For example, Ben told Jenny to go wonder around...WONDER. It's Wander. Jenny blew a SIGN of relief, and bit her lap instead of  her LIP. Oh! and Ben whispered in Jenny's EYE.

On top of all of that, the story kinda lost me towards the end, and I'll explain why. This is a veeeery short story (thank goodness) and so there is only one sex scene. Now, I was really digging the scene - you know, aside from all the horrid grammar issues - and then the characters/author decide to bring up the fact that they don't have any protection. Now, there is two options when writing any sex scene; the first is to not bring up babies or STDs or any of that stuff. Even though the writer is trying to make the characters and the scenario as real as possible, there's still this element of fantasy. So we as readers know that if the author doesn't mention it, then we don't acknowledge it. It's as if it doesn't exist in that particular world. The other option is to bring it up and tackle it head on. Personally, I don't have a preference, I'm ok with either way. My problem in this case, was that the characters were so worried about having unprotected sex for fear of Jenny getting pregnant; the words "becoming pregnant" were used like three times in 2 sentences. And then after making the reader so aware, they decide to fuck anyway. The reader is slapped with the reality that Jenny could have just caught an STD or gotten pregnant. You think things like, "Well, I hope she gets the morning after pill." These are things that we don't want to think about when reading an erotic story. And then on top of that, there's only a few sentences left of the story after that happens. So you finish the novella and you never had a chance to get back into the story.

It's like having sex with someone and they cum and just stop, with no consideration for the fact that you're not done. Next thing you know, they're out the door and you have no idea what the hell just happened. ...I guess I just got screwed.

The Accidental Stripper does receive the favorite line award, though. "She knew that going forward she was never going to date a guy who didn’t eat her out."

The premise of the story saved this rating, and the fact that it was so short there just wasn't enough time to ruin it more.

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